Have characters use their five senses. These senses include what a character sees, hears, touches, tastes and smells. To expand sensory details and freshen the narrative go consider a character walking on a windy beach. Do the waves crash onto the shore? (hear) Do grains of sands sting her cheek? (touch) Is the air salty? (taste) Is there a whiff of oiled bodies baking in the sun? (smell)
KiKi Palmer passed over to greener pastures where buffalo roam and deer and antelope play. Ironic since she hated the outdoors. KiKi is survived by her brother, Arthur, who came to her home every Sunday for the past forty years to enjoy a Manhattan. They usually ordered a pizza. Neither brother nor sister had married. According to KiKi, marriage was archaic. Two bull dogs, Sweet Pea and Cornelius, are available for adoption at the K-9 Rescue.